Challenge Yourself!

The Sherman Police Department in Texas just released the summary of a police report about a theft. It’s a well-written and very professional summary (not a police report).

Here’s a challenge for you:  Find five passive-voice sentences and change them to active voice. I’ve posted the answers below.

On June 4, 2021, Sherman Police Department received a phone call regarding a theft in progress in the 600 block of North Creek Drive.  The suspect fled in truck. The vehicle was stopped by responding officers.  The driver was detained.  Upon officer’s arrival, it was found that the suspect had left the store with over one thousand dollars worth of copper material and other merchandise.  The suspect was arrested for theft of material aluminum/bronze/copper/brass under $20K.  Robinson was booked into the Grayson County Jail.


Here are the five passive-voice sentences and the active-voice versions: 

1. 

The vehicle was stopped by responding officers.  PASSIVE

Responding officers stopped the vehicle.  ACTIVE

2. 

The driver was detained.  PASSIVE

Officer Curry detained the driver.  ACTIVE

3. 

Upon officer’s arrival, it was found that the suspect had left the store with over one thousand dollars worth of copper material and other merchandise.  PASSIVE

I learned that the suspect had left the store with over one thousand dollars worth of copper material and other merchandise.  ACTIVE

4. 

The suspect was arrested for theft of material aluminum/bronze/copper/brass under $20K.   PASSIVE

I arrested the suspect for theft of material aluminum/bronze/copper/brass under $20K.  ACTIVE

5.

Robinson was booked into the Grayson County Jail.  PASSIVE

I booked Robinson into the Grayson County Jail.  ACTIVE


How did you do?

Do you think this activity will help you avoid passive voice in the future? Great!

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