On July 15, a popular figure on social media who goes by the name “Ricky Vasquez” was allegedly assaulted inside the Cameo Nightclub in Miami. “Vasquez,” whose real name is James Riquan, was allegedly attacked by NFL player Mike Pouncey. The woman who accompanied Riquan that evening – Niya Pickett – tried to break up the fight and was allegedly assaulted as well.
You can read the story at this link.
And you can read the report below:
V01 (Pickett) /and V02 (Ricuan) advised me that while inside Cameo Night Club (1445 Washington Ave) between the listed times, an unknown male was trying to leave the cub when he pushed V01 and V02 out of the way. Victims state that S01 then proceeded to punch V01 in the head/The V02 in the head causing a large welt/bruising to both V01 and V02. S01 then left the area.
The report is concise and objective. But wouldn’t it have been better to write the whole thing in normal English?
For example, why write advised (which means counseled) when you’re trying to say that Pickett and Ricuan told you about the attack?
And why use V01 and V02 when it would be much simpler to write “Picket” and “Ricuan”?
Here’s another problem. Notice how awkward this sentence is:
Victims state that S01 then proceeded to punch V01 in the head/The V02 in the head causing a large welt/bruising to both V01 and V02. AWKWARD
The confusion evaporates in this version, written in normal English:
The suspect then punched Rickett and Ricuan in the head, causing large welts and bruising. BETTER
Here’s one more thing that’s puzzling. Wouldn’t the officer have seen the welts and bruising, if the attack really did happen? Why not say so? If this case goes to court, the defense attorney is probably going to ask if you saw the injuries. Wouldn’t it make sense to put that information right in your report?
Let’s go back to what’s wrong with terminology like V01 and V02. Picture yourself preparing for a court hearing. You’re reviewing the report you wrote weeks or even months ago to make sure you’ve got all the details straight and you’re ready to testify. And you keep getting mixed up about which victim was 01 and which was 02.
V01, V02, and S01 are useful if you’re redacting names when releasing a report to the public. But that practice only creates confusion when you’re writing a report for your agency. Avoid it!
PHOTO BY Chris J. Nelson
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