The Mike Bibby Restraining Order

Mike Bibby is a basketball coach who played 14 seasons with the NBA. In February 2019, Phoenix police investigated Bibby for allegedly sexually abusing a high school teacher in February 2017.

Because two years had gone by and witnesses had conflicting accounts, no charges were filed. You can read the entire story here: https://tucson.com/sports/arizonawildcats/basketball/police-report-witness-saw-mike-bibby-pull-teacher-into-car/article_4fb7b6ce-7dc4-11e9-98a5-af0e7f8bce8a.html

The victim obtained a restraining order, claiming that Bibby was stalking her. You can read and download it here: https://www.azfamily.com/restraining-order-against-mike-bibby/pdf_df427dce-3a26-11e9-877a-13cc69a3924f.html

The order – written by the teacher herself – is a model of good writing. Details are crisp and clear. Here’s an excerpt:

At approximately 2:30 – 3:00 pm, while returning to my classroom via outside route, Mr. Bibby was driving on our campus. He stopped his vehicle in from of us, waved to us to come to the driver’s side of the car. 1 don’t know this man personally. He specifically waved to me when I pointed to myself for clarification. I walked over to the drivers’ side of his SUV when he swung open the door and jumped out. He picked me up around the hips with my legs around his waist to hang on.

Notice that sentences are short. There’s no attempt to use fancy language or elaborate syntax. Although the writer is a teacher – not a police officer – this is a good model to study if you’re trying to improve your own reports.

Former NBA player Mike Bibby

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