Last month a substitute teacher in South Carolina brought a box of wine to class with her and became sick while she was teaching. You can read the police report at this link: http://www.thesmokinggun.com/file/box-wine-teacher.
The report is excellent – objective and efficient. I’m especially pleased that the officer used active voice throughout the report. Many reports lapse into passive voice near the end (the disposition):
I called EMS for the teacher, Judith Richards-Gartee. ACTIVE VOICE
EMS came to the school and transported her to LMC. ACTIVE VOICE
I charged Judith with Public Disorder Conduct (CIT #32881GU) and released her to EMS. ACTIVE VOICE
I would recommend only one change – using said or told instead of advised:
Mr Morton, an administrator at Brookland Cayce High School, advised me that a substitute teacher was intoxicated while in class. POLICE JARGON
Mr Morton, an administrator at Brookland Cayce High School, told me that a substitute teacher was intoxicated while in class. BETTER