Andy Moeller

Prosecutor Jim Walter in Berea, Ohio has decided not to pursue charges against Cleveland Browns offensive line coach Andy Moeller, who was accused of assaulting a woman at his home. You can read about this latest development at this link. And you can read an earlier news story, along with the original incident report, by clicking here.

Today I’m interested in one sentence from the incident report:

The victim was advised that the original complaint she signed would be forwarded to the Berea Prosecutor for review, and that no arrests would be made on the complaint at this time.

What’s your opinion? Is this an example of good police writing?

My answer is no (although most of the report is excellent) for two reasons.

First, “advised” is the wrong word. There was no “advice.” The victim was told the status of her complaint.

Second, this sentence omits an essential piece of information: The name of the officer who told her what was going to happen to her complaint.

Here’s how the sentence could be written (assuming that the officer writing the report is also the person who told her about the Berea prosecutor):

I told the victim that the original complaint she signed would be forwarded to the Berea Prosecutor for review, and that no arrests would be made on the complaint at this time. BETTER

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