Can You Start a Sentence with an -Ing Word?

Can you start a sentence with an –ing word? Yes, you can! In fact you can start a sentence with almost any word. (You may have been told that you can’t start a sentence with and or but. Not true! Professional writers have always started sentences with those words. There’s no such rule – and never has been.)

But some words are potential minefields for starting a sentence, and you should be wary of using them that way. Examples include like, such as, who, which – and yes, -ing words are risky.

Of course it’s correct to start a sentence with a word ending in –ing: But you risk writing a sentence fragment or a dangling modifier. It’s a good idea to check the first word of every sentence to see if either of those errors has crept in. (Checking the first word will also help catch other potential errors.) Read on for examples.

1.  Fragments:

Some –ing words are participles – meaning that they’re descriptions of something else. They need to be glued on to a sentence.

All morning long, two officers were busy. Digging holes in the back yard to look for the murder weapon. SENTENCE + FRAGMENT

“Digging” describes the officers, so it’s an adjective. It needs to be glued on to the previous sentence:

All morning long, two officers were busy digging holes in the back yard to look for the murder weapon. CORRECT

2.  Dangling modifiers:

Descriptions need to be placed next to the person or thing they’re describing. Separating them causes an error called a dangling (“hanging”) modifier (“description”).

I saw smoke coming out of a warehouse driving down Second Street. DANGLING MODIFIER

The warehouse wasn’t driving–you were!

Here’s the corrected sentence:

Driving down Second Street, I saw smoke coming out of a warehouse. CORRECT

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Apostrophes

You probably know that you should avoid using apostrophes to signify that you’re writing about more than one person or thing. It’s incorrect, for example, to write “The Johnson’s are on vacation this week.” The correct version is “The Johnsons are on vacation this week.”

But there’s an exception: Plurals of numerals and single letters use apostrophes. Here are some examples:

  • The 4’s in your reimbursement request look like 9’s.
  • The computer turned all the x’s in the report into t’s.
  • I found an envelope stuffed with 10’s and 20’s.

Using apostrophes correctly showcases you as an officer who takes writing seriously. Start today!

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Verbal or Oral?

You probably see it as often as I do: “I verbally told him to….” The command might be to get out of the car, open her purse, hand over his driver’s license, or something similar.

But verbal is meaningless in sentences like this. Verbal means “using words.” It’s not a synonym for oral. Verbal communication can include writing, texting, emailing, and writing in chalk on a sidewalk.

When you’re careful to use oral for spoken commands, you portray yourself as a professional – a good thing!

And here’s something else to think about. Do you really need “oral”?

Imagine this situation: An officer calls her husband to confirm plans for dinner with some friends. “Do the Johnsons know what time to meet us at the Olive Garden?” He assures her that they do: “I told them to be there at 6:30.”

He doesn’t need to say, “I verbally told them to be there at 6:30.”

Police jargon (“verbally”) is often unnecessary. It wastes time, and it looks odd when someone outside of law enforcement (a judge, attorney, community leader, reporter) reads your reports. Think twice when you’re tempted to slip into jargon!

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It’s and Its

Today we’re going to review the proper use of two words that are often confused: its and it’s.

The easiest way to learn the difference is to think about a familiar word you use every day: his.

You don’t use an apostrophe in his (do you?). Yet you know instantly that his is a possessive word.

Its (without an apostrophe) works exactly the same way:

George took his uniform to be cleaned yesterday. CORRECT

The department is redesigning its uniform. CORRECT

So here’s a guideline for you: Any time you’re wondering whether to put that apostrophe into it’s/its, think about his. If you can substitute his in the sentence, its (no apostrophe) is correct.

(It’s means it is. And its with an apostrophe at the end is ALWAYS wrong: its’.)

The department is redesigning his uniform. CORRECT

We’re redesigning our curriculum so that it’s consistent with state law. CORRECT

Here are four practice sentences. Scroll down for the answers.

1. I like this book, but some of (it’s, its) information is outdated.

2.  Although (it’s, its) obvious that the procedure needs to be changed, we need to retain (it’s, its) best features.

3.  The force doubled (it’s, its) size over the last 30 years, and (it’s, its) still increasing.

4.  Because (it’s, its) air conditioner is broken, that patrol car is like a steam bath when (it’s, its) very hot outside.

ANSWERS

1. I like this book, but some of its information is outdated. (like his information)

2.  Although it’s obvious that the procedure needs to be changed, we need to retain its best features.  (like it is obvious and his best features)

3.  The force doubled its size over the last 30 years, and it’s still increasing.  (like his size and it is still increasing)

4.  Because its air conditioner is broken, that patrol car is like a steam bath when it’s very hot outside.  (like his air conditioner and it is very hot)

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One Idea Per Sentence

Are long sentences bad – or good? It’s a question many officers wonder about, especially if they mistakenly believe that a long sentence is a good sentence.

That’s a question that might also be important if you move into an administrative position. Are long sentences better?

No. (Does that surprise you? It’s true!)

If you’re aiming to become a topnotch criminal justice writer, you would be wise to adopt a rule that many professional writers follow: One idea per sentence.

Shorter sentences bestow several advantages. First, they’re easier to read – a huge advantage when you’re busy preparing for a court or disciplinary hearing. Second, they have greater clarity than longer sentences, which can be confusing.

Most important, shorter sentences have fewer errors. As sentences get longer, the likelihood of subject/verb errors, parallelism mistakes, and dangling modifiers increases.

Compact sentences don’t have to be choppy and juvenile. You can always join two short sentences with a semicolon (be sure to skip the second capital letter).

I searched the suspect. He had five hundred-dollar bills in his right pocket.

I searched the suspect; he had five hundred-dollar bills in his right pocket.

You can also use who or which to join sentences.

I searched the suspect. He had five hundred-dollar bills in his right pocket.

I searched the suspect, who had five hundred-dollar bills in his right pocket.

And if you know your comma rules (they’re not difficult!) you can choose from a variety of sentence patterns.

One of the best ways to write a sophisticated report without sacrificing clarity is to employ bullet style whenever you have a list of information. (Don’t try to write an entire report in bullets!) Here’s a paragraph in conventional sentence style:

I searched Dickert’s locker. I found three $20 bills between the pages of a Sports Illustrated magazine. There was a pair of dice in the pocket of a uniform shirt. I found five $10 bills between the pages of his Bible. I found three unopened decks of cards at the bottom of a laundry bag.

And here’s the same information in bullet style. (Each item begins with a “bullet”).

I searched Dickert’s locker and found:

  • three $20 bills between the pages of a Sports Illustrated magazine
  • a pair of dice in the pocket of a uniform shirt
  • five $10 bills between the pages of his Bible
  • three unopened decks of cards at the bottom of a laundry bag

Much better, isn’t it? (You can watch a free video about advanced career writing by clicking here: Getting Promoted.)

 

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Interviews and Police Reports

Interviews are a normal – and important – part of your job. The way you talk to the public creates an image of you and your agency that’s likely to stick permanently. Even in a correctional institution, the way you question inmates creates an impression that can work to your benefit (or harm) later on.

Effective interviews can go a long way toward providing the information you need for the report you’ll be writing.

Here are a few tips for interviews:

1.  Deal with emotions first. A citizen who’s frightened or angry may not be able to give coherent answers to your questions. Reassurances (“You’re safe now”) and empathy (“I can understand how frightening that must have been”) can help citizens get past their feelings to answer your questions.

2.  Stay focused. Citizens quickly pick up on your actions and distractions – if your eyes are darting around and you’re jumping from one topic to another, for example. Moving logically from one point to another can do a great deal to calm a situation and get good information from the person you’re interviewing.

3.  Control the interview. Gently interrupt tangents and bring the conversation back to the issue at hand. In a frightening scenario, citizens gain security when they know a competent officer is in charge.

4.  Close the interview graciously. Thank the citizen for the information. Show that you’ve taken the situation seriously and will be following up, if necessary.

5.  Make sure you’ve covered every angle before you finish. Will the citizen need a victim’s packet, your business card, medical attention, or a follow-up phone call? Tying up all the ends thoroughly leaves a good impression of both you and your agency.

6. When you write your report, make a separate paragraph for each person you interviewed. That’s an easy way to organize your report – and it’s easier for anyone who reads your report as well.

7. To avoid time-consuming repetition, consider listing facts rather than writing long sentences:

Gollard told me:

  • he came home at 5:15
  • he saw the broken living-room window
  • he called 911
  • he didn’t notice anyone unusual in the neighborhood

 Use these tips to make interviews proceed more smoothly, and you’ll see improvements in your reports as well!

A free video – Interviewing Victims – is available for personal, classroom, and agency use.

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Your Eyes and Ears

Most people learn languages by hearing other people speak and trying to imitate them. We learn written languages much later, when we go to school and learn how to read.

It’s an efficient system that works well most of the time – but it can also create problems when we have to write letters and endings that our ears don’t notice.

Here are a few examples:

Many people forget the s in lists, firsts, firsts, and similar words. (Say them aloud and you’ll hear what I’m talking about!)

The latest newsletter lists several job openings that interest me. CORRECT

And many people forget theed in supposed to and used to. (Again, listen to yourself say them aloud.)

Although we used to discourage women from applying, we’re supposed to actively recruit them now. CORRECT

Your ear can create other kinds of difficulties too: Misspelling words (many people forget the middle c in Arctic and the i in foliage); punctuation errors (often you can’t hear the difference between a comma and a period), and sophisticated usage that you don’t often hear in everyday conversation–agreement issues for pronouns and verbs, for example.

Bottom line: Educate yourself. Reading is a wonderful avenue to better writing, and you don’t have to limit yourself to grammar books. Any good magazine or book will expand your knowledge of language.

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The Brett Kavanaugh Police Report.

Judge Brett Kavanaugh has been under a great deal of scrutiny as Congress debates his nomination to the Supreme Court.

A police report from September 26, 1985 involving Judge Kavanaugh has come to light. Kavanaugh allegedly was involved in a dispute in a New Haven bar.

No one – including Brett Kavanaugh – was charged. You can read more about the incident at this link: https://www.nhregister.com/news/article/New-Haven-police-Kavanaugh-interviewed-after-13275247.php

Here are a few excerpts from the report (you can read it here: https://nyti.ms/2xUsgvG). I’ve followed each excerpt with a comment from me:

At the above date these officers responded to the above location in regards to an assault.

[From me: this sentence is unnecessary. It repeats the information the officer already recorded. Officers are busy!]

Upon our arrival we met Mr. Cozzolino, he stated that a very tall subject hit him in the ear with a glass.

[From me: Omit “Upon our arrival.” And “subject” isn’t precise. The person who was hit was male. The report should say so. Put a period after “Mr. Cozzolino.”]

He also stated that he was in a verbal altercation with an unknown male.

[From me: “verbal altercation” is too wordy. “Argument” is more clear.]

At 1:20 AM Det. Reynolds was notified of the incident.

[From me: I was pleased that the officer wrote this report in active voice. But passive voice crept in at the end – as it so often does. (Sigh.) Who notified Detective Reynolds? If you thought that fact was worth recording, you also need to say who did the notifying.]

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Learning from Sherlock Holmes

The year was 1903, and Sir Arthur Conan Doyle had just published another Sherlock Holmes story: “The Adventure of the Norwood Builder.”

It’s fun to read, but it certainly isn’t relevant to today’s police officers, right? After all, most modern forensic techniques hadn’t been discovered yet. Fingerprinting was brand new then and makes only one brief appearance in the story.

But maybe there’s something in the story for officers today. Let’s take a closer look.

The story is about a homicide, and for once the police were smarter than Holmes–or so they thought. Detective Lestrade, triumphant with the discovery of a bloody fingerprint on the wall, crows, “you must acknowledge that we have been a little in front of you this time, Mr. Holmes.”

Later, though, in a private moment with his friend Dr. Watson, Holmes says, “The fact is that there is one really serious flaw in this evidence to which our friend attaches so much importance.”

“Indeed, Holmes! What is it?”

“Only this: that I know that that mark was not there when I examined the hall yesterday.”

Gulp. At the end of the story Holmes once again finds the true killer. The thumbprint was a red herring, planted there to implicate the wrong man.

What’s the message for today’s officers? Here it is: Always document not just what you did, but what you found (or didn’t find). Writing “I looked for fingerprints” is meaningless unless you add “and found none.” Sometimes – as Holmes knew very well -what you don’t see is more important than what you do see. Write it down so that you’ll have evidence if you need it.

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Think about a Courtroom

When you’re coping with a crisis on the street or in a correctional facility, you’re unlikely to stop and think about a courtroom or hearing room.

But when you sit down to write your report, you should mentally take yourself there. If you’re reporting a crime, legal considerations should shape what you write and how you write it.

What you need to remember is that your report can either support or weaken a case in front of a judge and jury.

Here are a few points to remember:

  • Be accurate. An attorney can do serious damage to your credibility if you’ve made mistakes. For example, don’t say “10 feet” unless you’re sure of the distance: “About 10 feet” is better – or “8 to 12 feet.”
  • Don’t mind-read. You can’t know for sure what an offender was thinking, planning, or trying. Write down only what you saw: “Inmate Farrell picked up a chair and ran to the table where Hawkins was eating.” You can’t prove that Farrell intended to hit Hawkins with the chair, so don’t insert that information into your report.
  • Know your agency’s or institution’s policies. Should you save your notes, for example, or it is ok to destroy them? (Notes can be subpoenaed for court hearings.)
  • Make your report clear and readable so that it’s easy to refresh your memory if you have to go to court. Use names, not confusing terms like Victim 1, Suspect 2, and Witness 3. Use active voice so that it’s always clear who did what: A statement like “A baseball bat was found under the table” isn’t much use if you don’t know whether it was you or your partner who found it.

Think about these principles often, and make them a regular part of your writing process. 

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